Year 5- week 3- English

English

On a fine autumn day they sailed past the Statue of Liberty. America No one swapped stories or argued. Babies hushed. Even the oldest passengers, and the most seasick, stood against the rail. America!

And there it was, New York City with those tall, tall buildings that touched the sky.

Grandmother! Jessie thought.

If only you could see what I see now!

 

Why do you think the author uses lots of short sentences?

Why do you think the author repeats the word tall?

 

Writing

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Jessie has arrived at her new home-  New York.  Imagine what it was like seeing New York for the first time.

 

 

5 thoughts on “Year 5- week 3- English

  • 16th November 2020 at 7:24 pm
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    1)
    I think the author has used a lot of short sentences because he/she doesn’t give a lot away
    so he puts it into short sentences instead.

    2)
    The author may have wrote tall twice as he is trying to describe the buildings as they are very very tall they touched the sky.

    WRITING
    I think that Jessie maybe feeling very frightened because she is new to America (New York)
    and she is meeting Kay for the first time. Also Jessie maybe feeling worried as she is miles away from her Grandma so she would be thinking of her and her Grandma would be thinking about Jessie too.

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    • 18th November 2020 at 6:39 pm
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      Hi Brooke. I agree, the short sentences don’t give us a lot of description. It also can help to show the character is feeling shocked or confused.

      You’re right, by repeat the word tall, they have definitely tried to emphasise the height of the building- remember that Jessie is only used to small buildings in her village.

      Writing- you’ve thought about her feelings- but it doesn’t sound like you’re telling me a story. Remember to use description- especially those expanded noun phrases, a range of punctuation, fronted adverbials.

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  • 17th November 2020 at 5:33 pm
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    Jesisie is feeling intimed because she is wondering will she ever see grandmother again as kid’s and the seasick people gathered jessie to see the crastal clear water and the sun set and see the beatufuil place of new yorck . people were wondering will I ever get a job the stopped argiaing over who will get a job and swapped storries and dreams and girded people to there hopes and dreams . jessiebis know away from grandmother and everyone she has known and ever seen .

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  • 17th November 2020 at 5:56 pm
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    Jessie is feeling nervous and intimidated because she is wondering will I ever get to see grandmother again since she is on the other side of the world .the seasickness and kids gathered around jessie looking over the raillings looking at the crystal clear water they did not argauge they slapped dearms and stories the were looking at new York reflecting on there self I hope I get a job but I need to believe in myself otherwise I wont get a job she hasn’t seen grandmother and everyone and every thing is in the other side of the world

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    • 18th November 2020 at 6:35 pm
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      Great ideas Imaobong. You’ve really thought about how she is feeling, and what is going on in her head. Can you add some punctuation to your writing? Remember the punctuation tells your reader when you want them to pause or even stop.

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