Wednesday 3rd June 2020 – Writing task

Good morning Year 4,

Using the plan you created yesterday to make your invention. You are going to write an explanation about how it will work to make your two fairytale characters.

You will need to include:

  • title that starts with How to…. (what are you creating)
  • a short introduction to your invention using these questions to help write who is the invention for? What is the invention for? Why has the invention been made? What makes your invention special?
  • use sub headings to explain how each part of the invention works  – think about the language you use  – e.g.created, functions, produces….
  • expanded noun phrases  – do not use it that doesn’t tell us anything  – e.g. the giant pot, the strong machine…

You can write in the reply or you could handwrite and send a photo of your work to

Remember to include as much detail as possible and carefully organise your work.

We look forward to reading your work soon.

Mrs Denny, Mrs Baldry and Miss Bishop.


9 thoughts on “Wednesday 3rd June 2020 – Writing task

  • 3rd June 2020 at 9:43 am

    oh i writ it yesterday with my drawing

    • 3rd June 2020 at 10:39 am

      That’s not a problem Kiran just a step ahead!

  • 3rd June 2020 at 10:44 am

    The speaking machine spanner!

    This invention is for a scientist. The invention is for to be tested in a laboratory for testing. It is very painful but it will still work. It does take time. The invention made out of delicate object but very dangerous of the potion. It is special because it took over 4.5 years to be built because it takes a month to build a part and it needs to charge of the low battery.
    How does it work?

    Drop area
    In the big drop you need to pour water to start the gas. Then put some salt in the small drop to heat up the engine. Now it is powered up to start.

    Charged area
    Press yes if you want it ready or Non for no talking. The power makes gas ready and strong for the power. The level tells if there is too much or not enough of gas.

    Helping area
    The gas to much is for if there is still too much gas. The stand is for because as it gets heavier it needs help to help it.

    Move on area
    The Mix does help it regenerate to get quicker. The potion power is ready from the energy.

    The turn speaking will hurt as it got lightning. The stand spot spanner will need anyone to stand and the person speaking or not.

    The Bear and the mouse accidentally done wrong thing so they can speak. The translucent glass had broke so it needs to charge and get fixed. The humble man took time to fix it once again.

  • 3rd June 2020 at 10:52 am

    I sent the work did u get it

    • 5th June 2020 at 6:20 pm

      Yes thank you for all your hard work Rihanna! Have a good weekend

  • 3rd June 2020 at 11:30 am

    The magical machine spanner. This machine is going to be hard because it’s going to take a month to make it. The potions might be very hard to drop because it’s dangerous. It is special because because it takes over a month to build a part and you will have to charge of the low battery. How does it work? Drop area For the big drop you will add water to start the gas. Then you will add a tiny bit of salt to heat the engine up. Then it would be powered up to start. Charged area If you wanted it to start you will press the green button and if you didn’t want it to start you will press the red button. The power will make the gas ready and strong. There will be a little clock on it to tell you if it’s high or not. Helping area If there’s to much gas you stop it and then you turn it back on. There’s a stand there in case it’s heavier. Move on area The mix does help it to get quicker. The potion will be ready because of the energy. Boom! The turning speaker will hurt because it got lightning. The person might not talk. The brave woman will be deaf but can talk and the handsome prince will be mute but can hear.

  • 3rd June 2020 at 12:35 pm

    The creation of the fairy tail characters

    the invention is for the dead can come back alive. the invention has been made because there could be more people alive. The invention is special because took a very long time to make and there is only one of them in the world.
    the cable
    there is a cable because you need to connect the electrical boxes together and if you don’t have this seven metres cable you would not be able to get people from the dead back into the world and have lots of good people in the world
    the electrical boxes
    You will need these electrical boxes so you can link these and produce the “the dead people” and they come alive. Also you will need these delicate boxes so you can put your wooden/dead people back alive.
    the giant door
    you will need a giant door so when you put your “dead people” in you will be able to take them out of the electrical boxes easier. It is very unique so you can not break it or it breaks down so be careful!!
    the two little dolls
    you will need these two fairy tail characters to test if your invention would actually work one is a handsome prince but he turns into a pig every night and a lost princess which got kicked out by it’s parents.
    you will need gas/steam so that you make you electrical boxes working you will need bout a ton due to how these boxes are you will also need these substances because so you make you electrical boxes working.
    three magic potions
    Finally you will need one to three magic potions depensing on the amount of people your going to cure you will need to tip it into the electric boxes and that is it.
    that is my invention.

    • 3rd June 2020 at 5:44 pm

      This is a fantastic explanation of your character invention machine. Great tehcnical language such as despensing, substanves, electrical, unique. Very impressed Talal! Remember capital letters and if you use fronted adverbials add a comma.

  • 4th June 2020 at 12:45 pm

    How to make your own fairy doll out of a machine!

    What is this invention?
    This invention is for making fairy dolls. The superb invention has been made because whoever doesn’t have A-lot of toys, they can come and buy a hand-made fairy doll. I make this machine so special because i want it to be interesting for people to watch how i make the fairy dolls.

    What do you need to make the fairy doll?
    This is what you need to make a fairy doll:
    1. Fairy doll machine.
    2. Liquid 1.
    3. Purple potion.
    4. Green Tea (special green tea)

    How does it work?
    This machine only works by putting the potions in the machine.
    (be-careful it might explode if you use the wrong ingredients)
    1. put your mannequin on the bed in the machine.
    2. you pour Liquid one into slot 1.
    3. Dunk the purple potion into the cup and pour it into slot 2. only dunk half of the cup.
    4. you press the go button to make the purple potion into smoke and it should fill the whole machine so you cant see nothing except smoke.
    5. you leak the tea into slot 4.
    6. once you have poured everything into the machine press the on button to activate the door to open.

    Now you have your very own doll from the big, good machine, the doll has to be a boy!
    if you want to make anything else tell me.


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