Y4 English Writing Task- Wednesday 25th March

Morninggggg!

Today’s English task is to write a story…

Using the plan that you created yesterday, write up you story. You will need to type your story into the comments box. Make sure you are still using all of your punctuation.

Use the headings in the plan to help organise your story into paragraphs.

Here is a useful checklist:

  • Expanded noun phrases
  • Fronted adverbials
  • Past tense
  • Similes
  • Short sharp sentences for suspense
  • Long detailed sentences to help build description

 

Be creative! Let your imagination fun free!

9 thoughts on “Y4 English Writing Task- Wednesday 25th March

  • 25th March 2020 at 11:27 am
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    One`s a pon a time there was a bucket called Charlie a shark named Rocco and a tree called maisie Rocco the shark bit Charlie the bucket to bring him down to the ocean safely but then maisie the tree fell down into Charlie the bucket and Charlie the bucket and Charlie the the bucket puts maisie the tree on the shoor near the ocean and maisie the tree replants on the shoor near the ocean happily ever after the end .

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  • 25th March 2020 at 11:29 am
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    One`s a pon a time there was a bucket called Charlie a shark named Rocco and a tree called maisie Rocco the shark bit Charlie the bucket to bring him down to the ocean safely but then maisie the tree fell down into Charlie the bucket and Charlie the bucket and Charlie the the bucket puts maisie the tree on the shoor near the ocean and maisie the tree replants on the shoor near the ocean happily ever after the end .

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    • 25th March 2020 at 12:07 pm
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      You have tried really hard Maisie

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  • 25th March 2020 at 12:40 pm
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    once upon a time, in a magical land of earth but a ufo landed in a whole and some aliens cruelled out it, well no one really calls them aliens, they call them, bob, Jerald, kristers and National Gallery.

    but one day, they saw a dog but there scared of dogs so they were so full of melancholy bob and Jerald said” I don’t want to do this anymore, ahhhh!” but kristers said” stop wining what harm can the dog do hmmm?” I think It want do harm said kristers

    after we got away from the dog, we started to talk about were we landed because we don’t know were we landed so. I think we landed in a royal building/ posh and rich. and now I kinda feel rich said everyone at the same time.

    but the problem is that most people hate bob, Jerald, kristers and National Gallery because we landed in a royal palace and most people like the royal palace

    the most important characters of this story as you know are bob, Jerald, kristers and National Gallery

    as the years past, everyone started to love bob, Jerald, kristers and National Gallery. but the good thing is that they are still together and love each other with respect, and then National Gallery said” I love you, can we kiss?” she said that because she’s a girl. they even got famous

    they had a happy life, because they got to stay in a royal palace so that’s exciting for them and they even have a butler. all of them said” ye pee ye pee”. they all said” I just think I need a power nap because what I’ve been through. I’ve never felt like this before probably because im an alien.

    THE END:HAPPY ENDING

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    • 25th March 2020 at 1:55 pm
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      Good try Kristers. You have tried to use fronted adverbials to start your paragraphs. Mrs Baldry

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  • 25th March 2020 at 2:59 pm
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    The animals were playing happily they were playing tag. Tiger decided to play a different game ,”no”
    exclaimed cheetah and lion “ok” exclaimed tiger. They were playing where the lush grass and sparkling water so they didn’t mind.

    An angry dark wizard appeared through a cloud of smoke.”I will turn this world up side down” shouted the wizard. He pulled a potion out of his pocket and threw it on the ground. In a flash, the
    world was up side down.

    “Do we have a problem tiger” exclaimed lion. “Yes we do” said tiger nervously. “The world is up side down!” shouted cheetah . So Tiger, cheetah and lion tried to figure a way to make the world return to normal.

    Soon,they decided to kill the wizard. So they traveled to the wizard’s place they eventually arrived. They fought the wizard in a great battle. Unfortunately the wizard dies and the animals win.

    Then the world returned to normal. then Then the animals carry on playing tag. And nothing happened again.

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    • 25th March 2020 at 3:25 pm
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      Well done Owen for organising your story using paragraphs. Great to see your speech. Check all punctuation is in the right place. You have worked really hard on the blogs this week. Hope your enjoying the sunshine

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  • 1st April 2020 at 1:19 pm
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    Once upon a time on a beautiful sunny day children were playing outside on school playground. One of the boys called Jeff turned around and saw a UFO in sky moving fast and then suddenly crashed into on the ground ! The boy was very confused. The UFO looked like it was broken into pieces. The boy told the teacher that there was a UFO on the grass. The teacher then called the police. The police arrived and investigated the area, and put caution tape around the UFO. The news reporters came and filmed the situation. Everybody from school went home and watched the news, they were very surprised, but at least nobody panicked. I guess the aliens where not looking were they were going.

    The end

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    • 1st April 2020 at 2:46 pm
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      Thank you for sharing your story, remember to use fronted adverbials

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