Wednesday 24th June 2020 – Writing Task
Good morning Year 4,
Thank you to those children who are sent their ‘Summery poem plans.’ The sunshine definitely helps us feel better. Today you will be writing your Summer/ Summer Holiday poems.
See how many of these features you can include in your poem and use your plans from yesterday to help.
Structure features
- a title for your poem
- write in verses/ stanzas
- make each verse/ stanza is focussed on one subject
- write in lines and not sentences using commas.
Language features
- uses rhyme
- use alliteration to repeat words and sounds
- use similes
- use metaphors
- use descriptive language
We look forward to reading your Summery poems later. If you prefer you can hand write your poem and email a photo to yearfour@lingsprimary.org.uk
Stay safe
Mrs Denny, Mrs Baldry and Miss Bishop
A Poem About Summer !
Summer summer is finally here. Finally time to have fun. We run and play allday in the hot sun. Summer summer run and jump and play in the swimming pool, eat a lot of ice cream to keep cool.
Well done Brooke, an ice-cream sounds like a great idea!
At home
staying at home is
boring,people say it’s amazing but it’s more like
nothing to do,however i have
a cat who lays outside
or on a mat or cushion inside,then me over
here wearing my hat for
no reason.But when
i go on a walk and the sun is out
i feel like the sun is a king or Queen because all of the
trees move when the sun
comes out normally.
Well done, I can see you have tried really hard.
Whoosh, whoosh, whoosh
Somebody is in the garden bush
Long tails, green lights
They are my cats!
They are on a haunting spree
But they found only one bee
Let me give you some food
Because of your bad mood
The sun appeared
I enjoy the sun shine,
With the breeze from the trees,
So, the sky was shy,
As the flowers had their showers,
The sun appeared,
Dan’s dark dog barks like a man in the fog,
Tiny tin tiger finding an armour,
Army at attention went quickly as detention,
The sun was strong and powerful as our son was broad and weak,
The lush leaves were appealing as the brushed sleeves,
The sun appeared,
The sharpness of the sword was weak as the radish part of the stem,
As the moon shone brightly the boom slightly shone,
The leaf blew like a bird catching its prey,
The heat blasted like a rocket attacking the heat,
The sun appeared,
The gorilla gave up like an animal attacked it,
Some countries are so hot that like UK is only hot as the morning,
The sun was a fiery monster,
The rain attacked the sun and lost,
The flowers were following the sun,
The days get stronger,
The sun appeared,
The grass waved it hands,
The clouds melted,
The power of the sun is getting stronger,
The rain moved on,
The sun appeared with the environment,
By Hargun Singh
Well done Hargun! the last verse is my favorite, I like the idea of the clouds melting.
BY THE SEA.
At a shiny, shimmering, sea,
Sand covers land but gets covered,
Water flows sand like a fossil inside,
Sedimentary rock,
Beach huts fill with stuff like a bin,
Sites of ruins covered in straight through like a river,
Wrecks fade into myth as people see some,
Brilliant work Cameron, I love the use of alliteration.
Summer fun
Whosh whoosh whoosh
somebody is in the bush
Long tails , green lights
they are my cats!
They are on a hunting spree
but only found one bee
Let me give you some food
because of your bad mood.
Well done Damian, super use of onomatopoeia.
my day of football.
on a Sunday I wake up prepared for all my hard work. Then I eat my breakfast also I am so generous.
now I am doing training feeling fit and healthy. A good thirty minutes running like a headless chicken this is so crazy my stamina is high and im not feeling so crazy.
Now im on the pitch prepared to do my bits working hard and feeling and prepared to be good on the football field. I know I have to do this every week put I get better every week hopefully I become professional and play for man utd and win five nil against arsenal and on the mercy side derby .
The day I work extra hard
In the morning I wake up, prepared to doing my hard work eating my breakfast now it is time all my hard work. now if done everything it is time to go on my road trip to my football pitch. Now im doing training a good 30 minutes work.
Now I am on the football pitch I think it is time to do my bits by that I mean by scoring goals by winning the match comfortable maybe I can get three goals that means I will have the golden goal and if I have the golden boat that mean I am baller.
Well done Talal. I can see you have tried really hard on your poem. I hope once you had finished your work today you managed to score a golden goal!
SUMMER TIME
I get sand hands,
when I play in the sand,
I also like to kick a ball,
and make a sand wall,
and then I cool down.
I love to swim,
In a paddling pool,
filled to the brim,
keeping me nice and cool.
I like to run on green grass,
because it’s like natures carpet,
The grass is like a green pass,
on the way to the market.
We get thunder and lightning,
filling up the sky,
it can be very frightening,
but it gives me a high.
Well done Max. I love that you have used rhyming couplets in your poem. I definitely need a full paddling pool today!
Sunny Days
What’s better than the summer’s breeze,
When you stand between the tall trees.
Strong, slithery snakes sneaking suspiciously at scared snails,
And what else…
There is so much happening in nature,
Summer is the best time for us to see it.
I hear plenty of bees buzzing,
And barbeques sizzling,
Cool cars cruising completely crazy.
The sun is excited for another hot day,
The sea is nice and refreshing,
The glittery waves make their own way.
Playing volleyball next to the sandy beach,
And at the end, for a treat, we eat a juicy peach.
when I send my work it deletes and it has happened twice what should I do?
Sunny Days
What’s better than the summer’s breeze,
When you stand between the tall trees.
Strong, slithery snakes sneaking suspiciously at scared snails,
And what else…
There is so much happening in nature,
Summer is the best time for us to see it.
I hear plenty of bees buzzing,
And barbeques sizzling,
Cool cars cruising completely crazy.
The sun is excited for another hot day,
The sea is nice and refreshing,
The glittery waves make their own way.
Playing volleyball next to the sandy beach,
And at the end, for a treat, we eat a juicy peach.
By Alex S.
Wow! I love the alliteration in this and it is making me want to visit the seaside!
when I do my work it goes of it and deletes and it has happened twice what should I do
Don’t worry Talal, we can see your work. We have to approve it before it will post for you to see so it will look like it is just disappearing.
Summer
Bright sun shining,
Warmth around,
On clear, blue sky,
Not a single could,
The sandy and dry beach,
Where the sun is too hard to reach,
The fun is as sweet as a peach,
Later I might need some bleach,
The sea is nice and cold,
The reflection of the sun is gold,
It is a secret,
With a million mysteries to unfold,
Well done, the last verse is my favourite!